The spelling and grammar has no affect on the story (which I personally enjoyed). But, if you really want to change some of the words, then here’s some grammar I would change: p3: “I’ve never seen such a big cherry blossom tree. I almost missed cherry blossom season this year. Thank you!” p4: You can remove the semicolons at the end of the sentence. p5: “Hummm, your dick looks delicious” p6: “ah yeah, your dick is hitting my womb!!” p7: “I’m cumming” p8: “We’re not in a relationship yet, shouldn’t we stop!?”
Forgot the capital at the start of your sentence and the period in the end…(not that it matters that much though. I mean, it’s the comment section so spelling is not a priority).
man that pink weed water goes hard, i hope my senior doesnt strip herself
9/10
The spelling and grammar has no affect on the story (which I personally enjoyed). But, if you really want to change some of the words, then here’s some grammar I would change: p3: “I’ve never seen such a big cherry blossom tree. I almost missed cherry blossom season this year. Thank you!” p4: You can remove the semicolons at the end of the sentence. p5: “Hummm, your dick looks delicious” p6: “ah yeah, your dick is hitting my womb!!” p7: “I’m cumming” p8: “We’re not in a relationship yet, shouldn’t we stop!?”
Like the art, tha translation it’s quite bad, But it dosen’t affect that much the experience.
you… as much of a valid point that is, you should probably learn spelling and grammar as well
Forgot the capital at the start of your sentence and the period in the end…(not that it matters that much though. I mean, it’s the comment section so spelling is not a priority).
My guy, you forgot a subject noun. To the shadow realm you go.
man how the fuck we go from friendly grammar fixes to being banished to thy shadow realm for forgetting a noun